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Post by coffee on Sept 22, 2005 23:28:36 GMT -5
I just read your Brother Dragon story Eolith...your Vampire story is much....much better. To be honest with you, I was dissapointed. I thought your writing was much better in the Vampire. I will agree with you that it does need some work. But doesn't every peice of literature need some kind of help? I know my writing is far, far, far from perfect. But I do think you could work more on your Brother Dragon story.
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Post by Eolith on Sept 23, 2005 8:07:35 GMT -5
Yes, I never really liked the outcome all that much... I think I've given up on it now. I'm going to try writing a fiction story without fantasy... which is new to me. lol. It'll be about a teen going through a tough transition into high school. P.S. Since I now feel I must compensate for the dissapointment my 'Brother Dragon' story caused, I have posted another fragment that I am fond of. Check it out, it's called 'Jaren'.
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Post by Shades on Sept 23, 2005 9:50:29 GMT -5
LOL Hey I didn't think brother dragon was all that bad, sounded like a younger person wrote it but still it's a fun story, the conclusion comes about to fast, instead of building the characters it seemed like you rushed too much into the ending. Haven't read Vampire yet but I'm heading over there right now.
-Shades, Admin.
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Post by Hana to Yume on Sept 23, 2005 14:41:29 GMT -5
Mou! I hate school. I was supposed to be on a few days ago but I never had the time! T_T
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Post by Eolith on Sept 23, 2005 17:11:23 GMT -5
Yes, I did write the 'Brother Dragon' story when I was younger... and I did want to get it to a quick end.
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