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Haiku
Feb 3, 2006 22:22:49 GMT -5
Post by Eolith on Feb 3, 2006 22:22:49 GMT -5
This is the only form of poetry that I'm even a fourth of the way good at. Not half way... a fourth of the way. Each one is a seperate poem just to make sure that's clear... they aren't stanzas. Long and lamenting Is the lone silver wolf’s cry In the diamond night
The chill wind slips through Trees twisted by the mountain Their might is shrouded
Reflections stretch Over the crystalline lake Images trapped
Water plunges o’er The jagged precipice. Gossamer curtains.
Sakura blossoms Swathe the grand ancient tree. Silken petals drift.
The falcon glides ‘pon Powerful northerly winds. Sharp eye watching
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Trajet
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Poetry is my escape
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Haiku
Feb 4, 2006 8:33:15 GMT -5
Post by Trajet on Feb 4, 2006 8:33:15 GMT -5
First off, they would actually work well as stanzas. I know that the form is haiku, but since it deals with the nature theme, it could work either way. I really liked the first one and the fifth one. I think they are very well done. To be clear, they are all great, I just like 1 and 5 the most.
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Haiku
Feb 4, 2006 12:46:05 GMT -5
Post by Eolith on Feb 4, 2006 12:46:05 GMT -5
Funny you should say that. Those two are both subjects that I have always been a bit obsessed with. The first came from a phrase I invented when I was only 11 or 12: 'Listen to the silver wolf's cry, long and sad, slipping through the twisted trees and lingering in the diamond-filled night.' As for the Sakura blossoms one, I have a huge cherry tree just outside of my house. I've always been enchanted with it when it blooms. In fact, I once took a few pictures of it and incorporated it into a graphic design: I didn't write the poem on that one but now I think it would be better with my haiku there rather than the one on it... not that it's super bad or anything. I may change it a round sometime.
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