Wolf
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Post by Wolf on Aug 28, 2005 9:50:45 GMT -5
The last of my Kind
Why do you hunt me? The last of my kind, Why do you hurt my loved ones? As I run you're always there like my shadow, They're all gone, am I your only prey? What have I done to deserve this, can I not Live free? But all I see are the stars- The immense pain in my head thundering like deer. My vision growing cloudy, the stars fading. You stand there laughing, never stopping, Until my shallow breathing stops forever, Never shall the world hear my howl..... Again.
That was one of the first poems I wrote properly about Wolves.
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Post by Niara on Aug 28, 2005 11:49:24 GMT -5
Great! Wolves are one of my favorite animals as well. Keep up the good work!
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Wolf
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Post by Wolf on Aug 28, 2005 11:51:23 GMT -5
Thanks I love Wolves! ;D
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Post by Shades on Aug 28, 2005 14:44:54 GMT -5
Cool Poem very nice and simple.
-Shades, Admin.
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Wolf
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Post by Wolf on Aug 28, 2005 14:57:26 GMT -5
Hey thanks
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Post by Shades on Aug 28, 2005 16:29:54 GMT -5
No Problem, it isn't hard to tell the truth.
-Shades, Admin.
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Phantom Rose
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Post by Phantom Rose on Aug 28, 2005 16:45:32 GMT -5
Good poem, you can read it quite fluently. =) Wolves are such beautiful animals, I hate when people hunt them...
Just one thing - you put 'you're' instead of 'your' in the fifth line. (I have an annoying habit of picking out mistakes like that).
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Post by Shades on Aug 28, 2005 16:50:54 GMT -5
Well it isn't a bad habit, nice to have an editor around.
-Shades, Admin.
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Wolf
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Post by Wolf on Aug 29, 2005 1:35:30 GMT -5
Thanks I'll go change it.
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