josh
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Post by josh on Aug 12, 2006 17:12:03 GMT -5
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Post by Shades on Aug 12, 2006 20:12:43 GMT -5
That has to be the strangest form I've ever read, it is like a mix between a poem and mic-hammer.
Not saying that it isnt good because it is, it is very good actually.
Very imaginative, and good sense of direction in the story. I forget the term used for the words, that describe a sound, but i like your use of those, very nice!!
Although it had a good sense of direction I found it very hard to follow along with, so maybe clearing that up a little, although it looks like you have finished and have no plans on changing it.
8.5/10
-Shades, Admin.
P.S. I like your anti- plagerism technique there.
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josh
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Post by josh on Aug 13, 2006 0:34:51 GMT -5
lol. Much thanks, yeah I don't really plan on changing it to much, but mayhap I will one of these days.
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Post by Shades on Aug 13, 2006 12:09:33 GMT -5
yeah dont both its good as it is.
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