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Post by omaklover on Aug 11, 2005 21:59:49 GMT -5
OOC: These are the first 2 paragrahs for my book Rich Girl. Please tell me what you think BIC:
When most people look at me, they say, “So are you one of those snobby rich girls?”. That just ticks me off. So what if I’m rich? That doesn’t mean I’m snobby.
So you’re probably wondering who this snobby rich girl is, right? Well my name is Gwen Tamberlyn. I’m your average girl teenager. I like to shop, gossip, talk about boys, etc. The only thing that makes me different is that I’m rich. And I mean rich.
copyright Sarah Müller
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Post by Shades on Aug 12, 2005 11:00:55 GMT -5
so far its okay but I really can't tell with only two paragraphs.......but if your planning on publishing it, you better not put it here, someone might rip it. Only post something you did for school, and it really doesn't mean alot to you. Like something you made up on the spot,and it is more of a practice story for the real thing.
-Shades, Admin.
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Post by Phantom Rose on Aug 28, 2005 16:18:41 GMT -5
It looks interesting - however, not much of a plot yet, as far as I can tell - but also a story where the main character could easily turn into a mary-sue. Be careful to give her some flaws; perfect characters are boring characters.
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