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Post by lostgirl on Sept 3, 2005 22:47:31 GMT -5
my music is the storm and it crosses my mind that no matter what the weather is like out the world goes on i will wait for the lightening the thunder is already here rumbling in the distance tension electrifies the air and something else i cant quite name the stillness of waiting anticipation perhaps i want to scream get on with it and as i think this the rain starts a thousand life giving droplets pouring down harder and harder faster and faster perhaps i should go dance in it after all lightening never hits the same spot twice now does it? the rain is coming down in sheets now but i am still claimed to think of it as a soft summer rain to cleanse the earth and clarify mother nature beauty in a word
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Post by daena on Sept 3, 2005 22:51:45 GMT -5
Oh my lady, this piece is riveting. I love the imagery of the storm, the lightning and thunder...the desire to dance. It is how I feel when I see the rains. *Grins softly* Kudos on this lovely poem! Give us more.
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Post by lostgirl on Sept 3, 2005 23:42:51 GMT -5
oh well thank you very much you are too kind i hope you give you more
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Post by Shades on Sept 4, 2005 13:31:44 GMT -5
I hope I give you more is what you ment to say right?
Well that poem was god although here is a little tidbit, a thousand tiny little life giving droplets, that line sounded very corny, so maybe changing that to something a little mroe uniform to the rest of the poem would enhance the whole effect of it, very well done.
-Shades, Admin.
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Post by lostgirl on Sept 4, 2005 14:06:05 GMT -5
haha cole you are such a poser its really quite funny
Note: I will not tolerate rude, and ignorant comments on this Forum all members are to be treated with equal respect, and I expect respect to be shown!
Edited by Shades.
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