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Post by Shades on Aug 22, 2005 10:05:48 GMT -5
I actually wrote this last night, half asleep trying to fall asleep is more of a chore when it is warm and then the breeze came and I was like omg I is gunna go to sleep so the last two stanzas were a real chore to write, C&C please, first rhyming poem, keep that in mind as well.
There he sat strong and abled Atop his horse tall, and fabled His war cry resonates the air All the enemies does is stare
As he comes atop the hill The opposing men get their fill Ale is passed round and round Liquid courage all unbound
Two forces clash head to head Crying is heard as first blood is shed His blade wheels through the air Someone’s neck it will tear
As dust settles down Dead are all the men of the town As the men on horses go away Nothing’s left in the month of May.
-Shades, Admin.
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Post by daena on Aug 22, 2005 14:17:03 GMT -5
Once again I am in awe of thy prowess as a poet, Sir Shades. Despite such darkness in the tale, the poetry is absolutely splendid! Wonderful rhyming.
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Post by Shades on Aug 22, 2005 19:01:30 GMT -5
YAY I actually had good rhyming apart from Pure, that one was a fluke though, thank you very much.
-Shades, Admin.
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