Mr. Greenglass

[josh]

Why hello there, under handed heavy one.
The bullied, the scared, the stolen from and negative some.
Whittled down, chewed up, spit out, feel proud.
Welcome to the machine whittled one.
Rays and Breaks and Cases of lies,
Weighed with plates and the basis of Guise.
The Habber man's waiting for you.
Be vigilant, create and protest, show the world and forget not one.
The Habber man's waiting for you Mr. Greenglass,
The Royalty won't forget for long,
The Bastards won, and gets along.
Let us Create a few of the original, the in between, and definitley not wishful.

[Shades]

that was cool, not alot of technicality as i can tell, but i like it, almost like a story very nice, thats really cool actually, props for josh lol.

8/10

-Shades, Admin.

[♠Kari♠]

I'm too simple-minded to understand but I still like it.

[josh]

Thanks to all for commenting, and, (no offense Kari) but lots of thanks go to 'Shades' for the wonderful and astounding critiques.

[vermilition]

very nice josh
im not a big poetry guy but i like it

[Shades]

Yeah, I'm the site owner so I try to critique as well as I can,

-Shades, Admin