josh
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Aug 12, 2006 18:06:58 GMT -5
Post by josh on Aug 12, 2006 18:06:58 GMT -5
Listen to how beautifully suggestive, Listen to how beautifully mellow, Listen to how beautifully, .............................................
These menial tasks, go and through, day after day, just to put up, allusions and illusions, who's hiding?
Oh that, not'd be I. Who knows.
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Aug 15, 2006 13:10:58 GMT -5
Post by Shades on Aug 15, 2006 13:10:58 GMT -5
free verse, no concrete in that poem at all, i wasnt greatly fond of this one, didnt really have all that much substance to it, nothing to sink my teeth into and get a hold of, get what i'm saying?
i like the opening bit, that is a very good set of lines just by themselves as a quote, but overall this poem, isnt at the same calaber as the rest of them
5/10
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Aug 16, 2006 10:47:24 GMT -5
Post by josh on Aug 16, 2006 10:47:24 GMT -5
Nope, wasn't really feelin' this one anyways. Thanks though.
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Aug 16, 2006 14:06:44 GMT -5
Post by Shades on Aug 16, 2006 14:06:44 GMT -5
no problem.
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