one more day (hope i did this right)

[faithless]

hi.. I'm new here... a person on nex spammed this link in my comment box, figured i might as well visit.

needless to say, i have no idea if there is a specific format, though looking around i got a vague idea of what to do... i just hope i did it right (as was stated in my subjecty-title-thing)

okay.. the title of the poem, is One More Day. i wrote it a while ago, people say its one of the better ones, and so here it is....

I lay here in my bed
Listening to the thoughts inside my head
nothing was worth that pain
alone in the rain
I can't stand to watch you go
but if thats the way life must flow
I'll accept it and move on
i just can't believe that your gone
i gave you my heart
and promised from the start
that i would never let you go
told you that i would never say no
was my love not enough for you?
was there anything else i could do?
that would keep you here with me
how can this be?
was i just a shadow in your mind?
caught in your invisible bind?
Here, under the shadowy sky.
do i finally say Good-Bye
hoping you would stay
for just one more day

please excuse any grammer/spelling errors...

[♠Kari♠]

I really liked it.
I don't think anyone cares about grammar.
Well not me, and certainly not Shades.. but I don't know about Vermi.

xD

[faithless]

well... i've been told its one of my better ones, though i'm not so convinced...

might i suggest.
having a seperate thread, whereas the authors may post their entire works?
i find it would be... somewhat more organized...

[♠Kari♠]

=) Good idea.
I'll pass this on to Shades.

[Shades]

Okay I have heard the idea, Faithless, but the only thing is the whole area, Library of Alexandria, stories, poems, etc. thats all for completed stuff... so if you have something that is completed put it in the right catergorie and what not. Welcome by the way to Silverpen.

-Shades, Admin.